Hee! You can give me minor notes if you made any. I am terrible about continuing to fiddle with things after posting, especially since I can always think that it's not really final until I post it on my Website. And sometimes not even then.

I really wanted hot confused hate-sex, but I couldn't get Tatsumi from exhausted to infuriated and I was too impatient to keep trying.

I especially like the bubble the size of the world, Tatsumi's heart's desire, and his fucked-up relationship with the even more fucked-up Tsuzuki.

Excellent! Thank you! Huh. I think Tsuzuki is actually in better shape in the story present, but it's possible that doesn't come through via Tatsumi's eyes.